this is the bill neff i remember! those "frazzett-like" fine lines on the elk/deer (?) are very well done. and the rocks came out great. you need to start doing more work like this. you know, the work that you actually care about. remember?
The thing that stands out is the swirling pattern coming off the rear of the guy. It's still there but it's not as bad. Try punching up that one cloud just before the top right corner, or having the diagonals of some of those clouds bleed through and almost off the page, you mainly just want to disrupt that pattern.
you need to start doing more work like this. you know, the work that you actually care about. remember?
which gives the image an altogether different feeling...
The thing that stands out is the swirling pattern coming off the rear of the guy. It's still there but it's not as bad. Try punching up that one cloud just before the top right corner, or having the diagonals of some of those clouds bleed through and almost off the page, you mainly just want to disrupt that pattern.